User:Redrose36/Costco/Hockey.Golf.Fishing Peer Review

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Redrose36


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Redrose36/Costco
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Costco

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead:

The lead has been updated to “Sustainability Efforts” which perfectly reflects the new content that was added. The first sentence is broader, the last sentence of the first paragraph does a better job of leading you into what to expect in this section of the article. The lead starts with information that makes it sound good but arguably should be in a different section previously such as products. Switching that to the emissions of those sectors they have would be better. The information in the lead about the UN goals, the packaging and the table is not previously present in the article which is good and fits the lead title. Lastly, maybe some more information about what the UN goals and how that is good or why that is good is the only further information I would add to the lead.

Content:

The content is relevant to the sustainability of Costco and the different areas they do business in. There is some that could be taken out for being too broad or previously said before (summarizing). And added with more of how Costco effects climate change and how climate change impacts Costco would also be very interesting. The linked sources all seem to be good sources and up to date. I would say it does address an overlooked and underrepresented area of most Wikipedia articles being sustainability, emissions and climate change.

Tone and Balance:

The content added seems to be all based on fact and secondary sources I don’t get a sense of opinion anywhere. The view of more of the impact climate change has on packaging and sustainability is underrepresented. The content seems to be genuine and not trying to persuade a certain way just inform about sustainability of Costco and its packaging efforts.

Sources and References:

All the content seems to be from secondary sources. Based on research and looking through them it seems the Costco Website wasn’t used or any biased journals. When sources are cited, they are first cited correctly. And when looking at the articles the information published seems to reflect the information found in these articles. All the sources seem relevant and current enough to still be used and held as reliable. The links seem to all work as they should. When looking at the authors they all seem to be peer reviewed articles and seem to be qualified in the fields they are publishing in. All of this is reliable and good for the content of the article, and it shows.

Organization:

The information is written clearly and is readable. The pacing of the paragraphs makes sense and makes the readability good. I couldn’t find any spelling or grammatical errors. The sustainability section makes sense as an introduction/lead and the packaging section is also broken down nicely but is short.

Images and Media:

The media added was a table, it is creative and interesting. I think the most valuable part is the amount of plastic reduction but this needs to be added to show that significance because some of the numbers sound big, but is it really? I don’t know and probably most readers won’t either. Other than that, I really like it and it adds a lot to the article.

Overall Impressions:

The article is more complete due to the added information and media about sustainability because for this company the article is long with many sections but nothing close to this. This is overlooked but shouldn’t be so it would be a good addition. The strengths are the few numeric things like the number of UN goals and the amount of plastic reduced. Some elaboration of how these goals and reductions impact climate change and how that is good would go a long way. Also thinking about a section of the climate change impact on Costco.