User:Redwood432/Herb Lubalin/Maddiebek Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Redwood432


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Redwood432/Herb_Lubalin?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There is a typo, "where supportive," should be "were supportive." Cut "very" before appreciative. Include the city where he was born. Nice tone.