User:ReedP12/McKinley Park (Sacramento, California)/JasperFLugo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Reedp12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ReedP12/McKinley_Park_(Sacramento,_California)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead I would briefly mention why its a historically significant place. The main article of the body has some really great information. I would cut it into two paragraphs starting with "Today, the park is a staple..". I think this would provide a better flow from the past to the present. Additionally, I would note towards the start of the body that the park was originally called East Park. I got tripped up on that half way through the article and had to go back to make sure I didn't miss anything haha. I would consider creating a separate section called "characteristics" or something along those lines to put the information regarding the size and geographic features. I think you have some great sources, they all look solid. Overall, I would just split the body paragraph into the three sections and expand them. I think you got a really solid foundation for an article that just needs to be a fleshed out more. Also, I think finding images of the park on Wikimedia would also benefit the article!