User:Reesegroover/Campylobacter jejuni/Cjbutler14526 Peer Review

User:Reesegroover/Campylobacter jejuni/Cjbutler14526 Peer Review

General info
Nathaniel Yankey, PatrickDenney3, Reesegroover, and simonahall2003
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Reesegroover/Campylobacter jejuni
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Campylobacter jejuni

Evaluate the drafted changes
It appears that they have not started working on the lead yet, but I know my group hasn't really done that either. I think that sometimes it's easier to go back and write the lead once you have more content. I noticed that this group decided to include a transmission section, I think this is smart. My page is also adding a transmission section as well. I would maybe elaborate on how it can be found in ice and water. The metabolism section is extremely well organized, easy to follow and read. I think they used the correct amount of sources for this section. I may suggest that they could maybe link the page about the TCA cycle or the EMP pathway that way if someone who is reading the article and does not know what these things are could click the link. Overall I think what the group has added already is good and it adds value to the article as a whole. the writing is clear and concise. I looked over the original article and maybe I missed it but maybe you could include what temperature this microbe likes and classify it as a hetero and autotroph. it may be helpful to introduce that idea before the metabolism section. finally I think so more images may be helpful. I know my group was able to find an image of spores from our bacteria so it is just a thought.