User:Reesepitch/Hong Song-dam/ILBO7water Peer Review

Lead:

Overall, the lead seems to me to provide a clear and succinct overview of the topic. The introductory sentence is concise. The lead includes a brief description of the artist's involvement in the Minjung movement. Some of the information is not present in the article body but I am guessing you are probably planning to further develop the body to include it. I think one part may be slightly too detailed:

"(he had sent slides of a mural he had created, along with around 200 other South Korean artists, to North Korea)" "Amnesty International adopted him as a prisoner of conscience,"

I could be wrong but I think this information could just be in a body paragraph instead.

Content:

The content is relevant to the topic. Biographical information is lacking.

Tone and balance:

The article seems neutral and balanced.

Sources and References:

There is definitely a lack of sources. I guess you have not put them in yet, so I cannot say about the reliability or quality of the sources.

Organization:

What is written is clear to read. I don't see any errors. The sections that are laid out seem to be good in that they can cover the major aspects of the article, they just need to each have content. The only section that has text is shorter than the lead. There is a lot to be added to the body.

Images and Media:

None

Overall Impressions:

The content added has definitely improved the article. The section titles seem to be going in the right direction. I'm sure as you continue the article will be much more complete,

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