User:Reesepitch/Hong Song-dam/Jieun7553 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Reesepitch


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Reesepitch/Hong_Song-dam?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hong Song-dam

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - I see that you paraphrased some parts of the existing Lead and also added a sentence at the end with the new information.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - Yes, it introduces the artist's background briefly as well as his focus.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - I think the length is great, it has a good coverage about the artist and his art while being concise.

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - Yes, it is included in the Lead and is a crucial piece of information to understand his art.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - I cannot answer this with the information in your draft because there is no citation in the new section.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - I believe you will add more information for your final draft, and the section you already added seems to be in a good direction.

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? - Yes, the information is objective facts of what happened and description of his works that is not biased toward any particular position.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? - No.

Sources and References

 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - I don't see the in-text citation yet but if you do it later it'll be fine.
 * Are the sources thorough? - It is a peer review article, which seems to be trustable and has a good coverage about the artist, so I would say yes.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? - Not much of a variety in sources yet but it is understandable as it could be really hard to find sources about an infamous Korean artist in English. Maybe you could find some more less formal sources as well as journals for back-up.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites?
 * Check a few links. Do they work? - The link does work but doesn't link to the page where the information is in.

Organization

 * Is the content added well-written? - Yes, it is easy to read through.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? - I don't see any.
 * Is the content added well-organized? - For now it is not much but seems well-organized.

Overall impressions

 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article? - Yes it will definitely add more to the context of his artworks if you will talk about his artworks in the body as well.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? - It helps the reader understand the essence of the article, most likely his art, better.
 * How can the content added be improved? - Just more information in general.