User:Reeseterry/Interracial Friendships/JrobinsonSP23 Peer Review

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Your lead paragraph is great and really well worded, but I think it should be the introduction to you peer instead of your actual article, because it seems more reflective rather than just giving the information directly. In the lead section, I would define/explain interracial friendships and then describe that they are different in the "cognitive, behavioral and affective methods" that underlie relationship trajectories in interracial friendships, but I wouldn't keep in the part about providing a unique opportunity for researchers, because I think it should be in your paper introduction.

Theories:

I appreciate how you started with the origins of the theory. So the interpersonal theory is the idea that the increased interpersonal contact leads to increased interpersonal warmth, positivist and similarity? Maybe you can add a transition into that sentence that clarifies the definition like "The interpersonal theory posits that this increased interpersonal contact leads to ..."

The section on Interpersonalizing Cultural Differences was very well detailed, I would just also add citations in the second to last paragraphs, just because all the other paragraphs have citations from your source. I also think you could consolidate this section a bit, because I think you have some great sentences that summarize the topic really well like "In other words, researchers behind this theory believe that it is not sufficient to be passive observers, but rather, friends should be curious, active participants.", which could possibly go after the first sentence in its paragraph and you'd still convey the point. Also, the small section at the end on what happens if friendships are not bridged can also be combined into maybe 2 sentences that are more concise. Ex. bridging relationships allows for emotional depth and tools for navigating conflicts ....

Positive and Negative Predictors of Interracial Friendships

These sections are great, super clear and straightforward!

For the exposure effects section, I would stray away from phrases like "this is likely due to.." because it makes it seem like its your own opinion, maybe say something like "which researchers hypothesize could be due to..."

Outcomes of Interracial Friendships

Great section! Super clear, not too much beating around the bush

General Notes:

For the words that you link other wikipedia articles, I think you should only link articles of concepts that are necessary to understand the topics and tangential topics. For example, I don't think "fourth grade" should be linked to another wikipedia article, but ethnic activism definitely should be.

I would keep in mind to be consistent with the hyphens, ex: African-American or Hispanic-American vs African American or Hispanic American, and to mirror what ever the literature uses.