User:Reham bro/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
I'm evaluating this article Hereditary haemochromatosis

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because I've never heard about this disease until I met a patient with a golden brown skin color when I was working in the hospital three years ago.

It was not a common condition in my area, so he struggled for many months till he found the right diagnosis. However, these months in trying to find the reason behind his symptoms, exhausted him either mentally or physically. Moreover, this untreated disease led to many complications which included skin pigmentation.

Therefore, it is very important to write about diseases where this accessible and simply written information can increase awareness and save the lives of many people.

Evaluate the article
This article has been rated as a B-class and it is a part of a genetic project.

Overall the article is well organized and covers the main points related to the disease. However, some points need to be addressed in order to improve the quality of the article.

1- The history section is very brief and needs more details. I found one of the sources that can help to improve this section. https://books.google.com/books?hl=ar&lr=&id=kE6mmwm5d8UC&oi=fnd&pg=PA3&dq=hemochromatosis+history&ots=jLk_e7XV7o&sig=64QEklFJHazPuF-uZjOihBwHzq0#v=onepage&q=hemochromatosis%20history&f=false

2-  This article mentioned some treatments where in the class, we've discussed that articles should not include any treatment or medical advice. Since this article targets patients who suffer from this disease and can depend on that treatment without going back to any doctor, this part has to be deleted.

3- I checked the article sources and I found some are web-based sources that are not considered reliable sources.

4- The article needs to have more images that will help to enhance understanding, especially in the genetic section.

5- Wikipedia articles target regular people, so this article can be improved by minimizing the medical terms that have been used.

6- I found the discussion which takes up a huge space in the talk is against the Wikipedia policy and it has superficial thinking where they argue about which spelling should be used in the article US or UK spelling.