User:Reidy3/Kreenholm Manufacturing Company/Imperialrussia1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Reidy3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Reidy3/Kreenholm_Manufacturing_Company?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

 * Kreenholm Manufacturing Company

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article has potential.

Lead
I assume you'll add this in later. The lead section on the existing Wikipedia page seems pretty good.

Content
I see that you added what seems to be a few sentences in the 20th century section. Most of the information comes from the existing Wikipedia page though. Maybe see if you could find and add some more information. Consider making more specific statements in the places where the article makes general ones. For example, under the 21st century section the first sentence states "In 2000s, the company lost money, and was under restructuring; many employees lost their jobs." How much money did they loose? How many people lost their jobs. Look for places like this one where you can add more specific information (if you can find it).

Also specify which currency you're using when quoting values. Under the pre-annexation part the article states "The wages paid in 1910 amounted to $1,370,000." Which currency is that?

Tone and Balance
The tone of the article seems neutral. Sources and References

It is a bit difficult to provide feedback due to the lack of new information to the article at present. I found a book that you could check out. It's called "Law and Disorder on the Narova River: The Kreenholm Strike of 1872" by Reginald Ely Zelnik. The Kreenholm strike of 1872 isn't an existing Wikipedia article. Maybe you could do that one if you're struggling to find a page you can do.

Organization
I see that you've focused on the 2oth century part here. You've organized the information into pre and post-annexation periods. That is good.

I think you can improve the article a lot by focusing on this. It is a bit difficult to read the article now. Sometimes it feels like the ideas in a sentence that follows a previous sentences is random. An example of this is "The Krenholm mill was founded in 1857 by the pioneer of the Russian cotton industry, Ludwig Knoop, along with Kozma Soldatyonkov, and Aleksey Khludov. After the 1872 cholera epidemic which killed 420 workers, the mill's internal police force was disbanded."

It seems that those two pieces of information aren't connected. The first sentence begins by talking about the mill's founding in 1857. The second sentence jumps to 1872 and talks about the mill's internal police force. The first sentence doesn't flow into the next. You would need to discuss the mill's internal police force prior the second sentence; we wouldn't know that the mill even had an internal police force or what they do.

Try to spot where the sentences don't flow. I see that the article is already organized by centuries and under those larger headings try to organize it based on themes or time. Referring to the example I just gave, don't jump from 1857 to 1872 so abruptly if you can avoid it. Really try to organize it in such a way that people who don't know anything about your topic could understand each sentence and piece of information. Reach out to me on the talk page of your article or something if I'm not being clear. I hope it helps.

Overall Impressions
The article has potential for improvement. Consider looking at the book I shared while searching for other sources. Maybe the sources that the book uses could be of help as well. In addition to adding more content, focus on the organization. Ask yourself if someone who doesn't know anything about the topic could understand each sentence in the order they are written in.Hopefully this helps.