User:RespectRazzy/Shams (deity)/Osckrrtt22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

)RespectRazzy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:RespectRazzy/Shams (deity)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Shams (deity)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead of your assignment is great it tells me who the deity is, but maybe having more details about them and not relying on having other names that are connected to them be the main focus would be amazing, so just adding one more either fact or thing about them thats miniscule would just bring it all together. Some grammar like capitalizing the word God is just needed in many areas of your work. The links and your are great and they look like they come from a good reliable place that won't give you too much trouble.