User:Revengemin Button/Catholic Church in Chile/Studentbreese Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Revengemin Button


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Revengemin%20Button/Catholic_Church_in_Chile?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Catholic Church in Chile

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Draft does not change the lead, and I don't think it needs to.

Content: You have a great amount of content that really goes into the divides in the Church throughout the 70s. As this article is about the Church, rather than Allende or Pinochet themselves, you do a great job focusing on it and relating the Church to their administrations rather than the other way around. I think it would be good in the "Presidency of Salvador Allende" section, where you describe emerging movements within the Church, to talk about some of their tenets and provide more of a timeline for them. For instance, you say "The 80 would subsequently form the organization Christians for Socialism. Other Catholic organizations were also a part of Allende's Popular Unity coalition, including the Christian Left and MAPU, which split off from the more centrist Christian Democratic Party." I think it might be good to state when Christians for Socialism formed and some of their basic tenets, and it would probably be good information for the Christian Left, MAPU, and Christian Democrats as well. What kind of work were Christians for Socialism doing during Allende's presidency? And the others?

Tone and Balance: Informative, neutral tone that seems fit for Wikipedia.

Sources and References: Great use of multiple, relevant secondary sources published in the last thirty years. You cite throughout the draft, and nothing stands out to me as a glaring "citation needed."

Organization: I think splitting the information between the Allende presidency and the Pinochet dictatorship is a good way to organize the article. There could perhaps be a third section titled "Legacy" or "Into the present" or something like that where you talk more about the Church coming out of the Pinochet regime, for instance detailing their contributions to Chile's truth commission, but as it stands you provide a great amount of information about the time period you're dealing with. Draft is easy to read and without spelling errors.