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Instead of using quotes for source #4, the sentence should read: The thirteen grandmothers maintain indigenous traditions, educate others about Native traditions, and support the legalization of growing plant medicines.

For citation #7, the source could not be accessed by the general public without a fee paid. The direct quote should be paraphrased from "build our relations and learn about each other's cultures" to "forming relationships and educating others about their traditions".

For citation #5 where all the women who are in the council are listed, six of the thirteen are missing biographies, which are easily obtained from the source itself.

Citation #1 -- the proceeds for the book go to the Civil Society Movement, which may push a biased agenda with which not all agree; however, the information posted was written bias free.

Most of the sources obtained for the Thirteen Grandmothers article have repetitive information. There is an update to Grandmother Beatrice Long Visitor Holy Dance's biography: Beatrice had died in 2016. The Creation to Completion ceremony was held in Phoenicia, New York, where the Grandmothers first met, on 25-28 August 2016. Beatrice served on the Council for twelve years. It has been reported that was the final gathering of the Thirteen Grandmothers. After looking over the 13 Grandmother's page, I noticed that there are not links to wiki biography pages for all of the grandmothers. I also saw under the Council Meetings section in the second paragraph that there is not citing for the quotation saying that the Grandmothers "laid a 'flag of peace and conciliation'" which needs to be added in. I believe that the Media section could be improved by adding summaries of the work done on this group and maybe quotes from those books and documentary instead of just the titles and authors.

The source I found to add to the page is an article from the Press Republican which summarizes a meeting held by the Grandmothers. I like this article because it also gives a little bio for each member of the council and it provides many quotes from each of them on their beliefs, mission, and how they got involved in the council. I did not notice any bias in the article, it is mostly direct quotes from the grandmothers. Here is the link: http://www.pressrepublican.com/news/wisdom-teachings-for-seven-generations/article_4fcbabf4-5f6e-52c5-a380-4e4dd0ceeacc.html

Nestor- International Council of Thirteen Indigenous Grandmothers[1] Why does the article switch from spelling out the number thirteen to putting "13" in the title of the organization? The correct way is to spell out the number and not just put the digits. In the media section of the article the first book mentioned didn't have any information about the book besides it's title, author, and the date it was published. I feel they should have added a very brief summary of the book to show it's relevance to the subject. I also feel like all of the thirteen grandmothers should have their own wikipedia page to provide information about each woman.

New reference

Flordemayo is one of the thirteen grandmothers, she was born in Nicaragua "under the sign for the seed, in Mayan astrology". She has the ability to heal spirits, she also has the ability to see color, light, and sound in ways a normal person could not. With that ability she can see into an individual's or a and find any imperfections whether they be physical, spiritual, or emotional. [2]

2/28/2017 - 13 Grandmothers new citation
After reading this article the reader is left asking about some details that are missing. As I searched for another good source for this article I found that it was a lot harder to find information. I was looking for more general information on how the Grandmothers first began as a group, but I did come across some additional information on how they travel. It briefly talks about the grandmothers and how you can give them support. It said that they travel only by donations to meet together. However, I did feel that this online magazine was biased in promoting the adoption and support of the grandmothers. Therefore, I am not sure if we would use it for any more information other than the fact of how they travel.

citation for 13 grandmothers article: Roger Collier CMAJ: Canadian Medical Association Journal http://dx.doi.org/10.1503/cmaj.109-3259 This is a scholastic journal documenting an attempt made in Africa by 500 grandmothers from 13 nations to form an organized group and confront the AIDS epidemic. This source could be a possible reference as an example of similar efforts to the 13 indigenous grandmothers effort.

Draft for Beatrice Long Visitor Holy Dance's page: After serving on the Council of theThirteen Indigenous Grandmother's for twelve years, Beatrice Long Visitor Holy Dance died in 2016; her life was celebrated for four days from 25 August to 28 August 2016 with a Creation to Completion Ceremony in Phoenicia, New York where the grandmothers first began their mission.