User:Rhiannongro/Women's Memorial March/Sidney Gordon Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Rhiannongro


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rhiannongro/Women's Memorial March


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women's Memorial March

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Good that you start your statement with a land acknowledgement.
 * I like the amount of detail you have in the march routines.
 * Good neutrality, while remaining a focus on the marginalized groups this march is oriented towards.
 * Be careful with some of your sources, blog posts are not considered a reliable source on wiki, and I can see that the second source on your biography is a blog - I had to omit this one from my sources too.
 * One of your links does not work in your bibliography, source four.
 * I think you have a lot of great context that subliminally addresses the sex workers effected, but maybe directly addressing that more and expanding on some of the social contributions that led to these outcomes that would be a good contribution, which could also serve as very relevant contributions to your “Police” and “Robert Pickton” sections. The articles I will be adding to will have direct correlation with this March and both of these subcategories so we should find a way to link them together.
 * I can tell this is very much still in process so the errors and stuff cannot really be commented on but you seem to be off to a great start! Sidney Gordon (talk) 06:49, 29 March 2021 (UTC)