User:Rhs2x/Space Invaders (book)/AidanAjw Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

That of Rhs2x, Aml9x, Mar318ie, and Mbb5c.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing

User:Rhs2x/Space Invaders (book)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Super excited to be reviewing this article! The name of the novel has intrigued me since I first saw it. I have gone through it section-by-section, and noted a couple general things at the end.

The Intro
There's really great info here! I think this intro section has just what it needs, in terms of content: the overview followed by the explanation of the name is perfect, structure-wise.

Only the title of the novel itself (in both languages) needs to be boldface in the intro - not the entire first sentence. A good example is this article. That's the only major thing I noticed in this section. A couple smaller copy-edit points are that "a Estrella" should be "an Estrella," if the indefinite reference to this character is intended, and the final sentence of the intro seems a bit confusing at first glance: "The story is structured and includes many of the aspects of its namesake - the 1978 video game Space Invaders." At first I thought this sentence was saying that the novel is 1) structured, and also 2) has similarities to the video game, whereas I think perhaps the structure point was supposed to go the video game part, as  the "aspects of its namesake," which is unclear at first. That final sentence would also probably benefit from having a link to Space Invaders.

Infobox
Great job on this! Looks legit.

Summary
Good summary. Some links would be good here, perhaps to the National Anthem of Chile and the Virgen del Carmen, place- and event-names, etc. There are a few places where the section could use small edits. One example is, "Opposition to the Pinochet Regime is discouraged by death", which would probably be clearer if "by death" were replaced with "by use of the death penalty" (since "death" isn't the discouraging).

Characters
Looking great so far. The section about Estrella's star-signature could be clarified a bit, for those who can't translate the name on the spot and won't figure out the connection.

Structure
They'll probably want this section to have some citations, so if a source talks about the structure (especially the interpretive aspects like the statement that the unknown narrator "can be assumed to be" various people). Interesting information in this section!

Background
Excellent job here: well-linked, well-cited, well-written, and even an image! The colon in the second paragraph should probably be a comma. Overall a great section - as I understand it, the way this part is done is how the whole thing should be, in terms of links, citations, structure, etc.

Critical Response
Great info and very well cited! The citation number things should go after the punctuation, though. Also, since these interviews, reviews, awards, etc. all happened in the past, this whole section should be past tense rather than present ("One reviewer felt" rather than "One reviewer feels").

(General stuff)
The article meets notability requirements, etc. All the links work and the references all look correct. The key topics are covered by the various sections. All this is great!

--AidanAjw (talk) 20:08, 5 April 2021 (UTC)