User:Rhya Evans/Women's reproductive health in the United States/Sh1539 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ReedNatalie


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ReedNatalie/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women's reproductive health in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! I have just a few suggestions for how you could fine-tune your Wiki article.

Lead: The PCOS sentence seems a bit out of place with the rest of the lead. The other sentence I like!

Content: Strong content throughout the piece, it definitely provides information about important topics that were not covered in the article before. The race and reproductive health section is a great addition to the article, but it could be strengthened by bulking it up a bit more. How are other minority groups affected? Why might this be? Any specific examples?

Tone and Balance: neutral tone throughout, very objective

Sources: looks good, check out the things wiki is highlighting in red

Organization: It seems like the fertility awareness models would go under contraception, but will the ART and race sections be new headings? Make sure you have a clear plan of where these are going. Also, I understand why you included the information about race and SES at the end of the ART paragraph, but I felt like that it also could apply to race and reproductive health. Maybe consider making this change or creating a subsection of sorts. In addition, you could integrate some more links to other wiki articles within your work. Here are just a few that stuck out to me while reading: STDs, ovulation, calendar based contraceptive methods, IVF, preeclampsia, etc.

Overall Impressions: Nice work overall!! This is a really important topic and you did a great job.