User:RiannaNguyen/Women and video games/Yare.26 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm reviewing RiannaNguyen's work.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RiannaNguyen/Women_and_video_games/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women and video games

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The information you have so far seems to be very intresting and eye catching for the reading. I do want to say that your writing is in the wrong place so you should move it to your sandbox and find a place in the article where you might think will flow best. I think you should add example in which you see women being sexualized in video games and possibly provide images to see these examples. Your spelling and grammer is good and your writing tone is neutral.