User:Richa Amin/Child marriage in Cameroon/Ppowers2001 Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Richa Amin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Richa%20Amin/Child_marriage_in_Cameroon?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Child marriage in Cameroon

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There wasn't anything in the Sandbox draft, so I made some comments based on the actual article page. I'm not sure if that's helpful because I don't know what you've added so far, but I hope this helps at least a little. I basically treated it as if you wrote the whole article, which I'm not sure if that's true, so just disregard anything that doesn't apply to what you're working on

Maybe try breaking the article up into a few subsections. The material is good and the content is informative, but I think it would be clearer if there were defined subsections. The paragraphs are already pretty sorted based on idea, so you would be fine just adding a title to each one of those paragraphs - Ideas could be like Cultural Beliefs/Practices, Laws about Child Marriage, Reform Efforts etc.

Factors leading to child marriage in Cameroon include education, poverty, rural evidence, and social norms. - This is a sentence from the article. I don't think it's entirely clear what rural evidence means. Good use of more than 10 sources.

Overall, I think you did a good job with the page and incorporated your sources well. The information is straightforward and clear without seeming opinionated.