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Revising Wikipedia project - 7/27/2020

Article: Active surveillance of prostate cancer

What I would improve: The auto-populated problems listed on the wiki page state - "This article may be too technical for most readers to understand..., and This article's lead section may be too long for the length of the article..." after reading and skimming through the article, there are truths to those statements. A lot of the language takes on a technical technical explanations that are hard to follow and, while I'm unsure of usual length, the lead section might be organized better to start from a more understandable beginning (though this is just an initial thought).

Effects of changes: I believe that helping make those changes (as touched on above) could help the overall progression of the article. I think that by introducing more lay-language it could act as a reminder, and direction, for those that may edit afterwards. By setting an targeted, understandable-language goal it could help both those that come to the article to learn as well as those that come to edit the article; by transforming and translating technical language into lay-language, we improve our own understanding. The lead section edits may be beneficial in, again, helping those that come to the article to get a better understanding of the subject. I would address an concerns that others have about my changes by engaging in the discussion with them to better understand their views and to work towards a resolution.

Chorioamnionitis Edits/Sources

Updating the "Associations" section. Relevant sources:

- Chorioamnionitis in the Development of Cerebral Palsy: A Meta-analysis and Systematic Review

Summary: Association exists between Chorioamnionitis and Cerebral Palsy, but that association (and any causal relationship) is weak. The review found that preterm histologic chorioamnionitis may be a risk factor for cerebral palsy, but clinical chorioamnionitis is not. However, they also found that clinical chorioamnionitis is associated with both term and preterm cerebral palsy while histologic chorioamnionitis is only associated with term cerebral palsy. List of associations from

Intraamniotic infection can be associated with acute neonatal morbidity, including neonatal pneumonia, meningitis, sepsis, and death, as well as long-term infant complications such as bronchopulmonary dysplasia and cerebral palsy.

Causes (of chorioamnionitis)
Causes of chorioamnionitis have been found to stem from microorganism infection as well as labor and obstetric-related factors. non-microorganism range across bacterial, viral and even fungal infections.

Microorganisms
Bacterial, viral, and even fungal infections have been found to cause chorioamnionitis with the most common occurring from Ureaplasma, Fusobacterium, and Streptococcus bacteria species. Less commonly, Gardnerella, Mycoplasma, and Bacteroids bacterial species, as well as sexually transmitted infections of chlamydia and gonorrhea, have been implicated in the development of the condition as well. Other studies are continuing to identify other microorganism classes and species as infection sources.

(Possible dividing into Bacteria, Virus, and Fungal sub-sections)

Obstetric and other
In addition to microorganism causes, birthing-related events, lifestyle, and ethnic background have been linked to an increase in the risk of developing chorioamnionitis. Premature deliveries, ruptures of the membranes of the amniotic sac, prolonged labors, and first time giving birth have been associated with this condition. At term women who experience a combination of pre-labor membrane ruptures and multiple invasive vaginal examinations, prolonged labors, or have meconium appear in the amniotic fluid are at higher risk than at term women experiencing just one of those events. In other studies, smoking, alcohol use and drug use have been noted as risk factors in addition to an increased risk for those of African American ethnicity.

PPROM: premature preterm rupture of the membranes

At term: long labour, membrane rutptures, nulliparity, and a combination of pre-labour rupture of membranes at term in women who also receive multiple invasice vaginal examinations, prolonged labour or have meconium in the amniotic fluid are at higher risk (For intro section of Chorioamnionitis)

Chorioamnionitis typically results from an infection caused by bacteria ascending from the vagina into the uterus but is also associated with premature or prolonged labor. The risk of developing chorioamnionitis increases with number of vaginal examinations performed in the final month of pregnancy, including during labor, as well as with tobacco and alcohol use.

Foundations 2: Peer Review - Breast prostheses
Part 1: All group members should respond to the following prompt, with specific examples:

Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

The group worked on a start-class quality article and made a substantial amount of edits and additions. Among their edits were changes to the article structure and reformatting of headers. The edited article flows well but when considering the medicine-related style guideline, there are some adjustments that could be beneficial. When considering prostheses, the "device" section of the guideline would be a good place to refer to. In that section, the recommended order of presenting information is in "uses", then "manufacturing", then "history". The order in which the group edited the article still flows, but if considering the point of view of a non-medical person visiting the page, the guideline structure makes sense for those seeking relevant information for today.

Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

Overall I believe the group has achieved their goals. The group proposed four changes in their initial proposal; one was to rearrange topics and headings (with a dedicated section to USES and a subdivision of TYPES), a second was to refine the introductory paragraphs to include touching on history, a third was to alter/update headings to better suit each topic, and the fourth was to add information to the mastectomy portion of the article. These four proposals were acted upon and I believe the group has achieved their overall goal for improving the article. The article may not be organized (by topic) in the way of the guideline, but each of their proposed adjustments were made and I feel it adds to the quality of the article.

Is there any evidence of plagiarism or copyright violation? If yes, specify…

Through some searching, I found a section of the introduction that was very similar in wording to cited source (first entry for source #2). I do not believe this was intentional and is most likely due to limits of rewording options. Beyond that, there does not appear to be any evidence of plagiarism or copyright violation. However, I am still in the process of reviewing and will update with findings (if any) that I happen across.