User:Ridley0526/Chicago Boys/Pancho.Villa1701 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ridley0526


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ridley0526/Chicago_Boys?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chicago Boys

Jonah's peer review
Lead


 * The only real additons to the lead included the influence the Chicago Boys had on other neoliberal world leaders. While it's an interesting and positive addition, I would suggest moving it to another subsection other than "history," maybe create a new one called "international influence" or something
 * The overall formatting of the lead has not been altered from the original article, which is fine

Content


 * The content added is focused mostly on outlining the Chicago Boys' policies, with some additons to the "history" subsection. It is rather amazing that the origninal article did not touch on the policies at all, so it was a much-needed additon.
 * Under the "history" additons, Ripley0526 mentions "el ladrillo." Personally, I have no idea what that is so providing some extra background would be very helpful to a reader. Also, after the sentence "this was seen as an economic miracle..." there should be a citation or the prase should be removed
 * The content is not up to date, although that shouldn't be an issue. Unless the Chicago Boys still have influence in world politics, mentioning any actions in the 21st century should not be needed

Tone and Balance


 * The tone is very neutral for the most part
 * Both the pros and cons of the neoliberal reforms are explained very clearly, and it is pointed out that the reforms negativley affected the poor while boosting the rich. While it would be very easy to point this in a negative light, the new article remains imparcial

Sources and References


 * Seven additonal sources are given, which seems to be pretty solid
 * I would still suggest adding a citation when refrencing "el ladrillo" because that was very confusing to me as a reader
 * In the second paraghragh under "lead," I think a citation is needed surrounding the Chicago Boys in pop culture, like a link to a movie review or something

Organization


 * Again, I would suggest moving the mention of the neoliberal policies to an entirely new section called "international influence," or someting like that. While it is historical, the lasting influences call for a new section entirely
 * All the text is solid, although per my other critiques I would suggest reformatting certain sections and outlining some things in different ways, but the actual text itself does not need to change.