User:Rileeeee ;D/Leslie Ewing/Vampiredandy Peer Review

I really enjoy the way that you have made yourself an outline as the basis of your page. I plan to do this as well, as a method of making the process less daunting.

One thing that I think may be distracting on your page is the inclusion of Ewing's status as a breast cancer survivor in the first sentence of her lead. Is this information about her equally important to her career as an artist and activist? Or is it secondary to her work? If this is elaborated in the way you see your page I think it could fit well, but it doesn't seem as pertinent as the other information given right away.