User:RileyD101/Cordyceps militaris/Monsteramom Peer Review

General info
RileyD101
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:RileyD101/Cordyceps militaris
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Cordyceps militaris

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- I think the lead would benefit from having why it is such and important species right now! Such as the medical applicabilities being researched.

Content

-Your bibliography isn't posted in the spot where I can access it, but I can check back when you get it in there and make sure you have some reliable, up-to-date sources!

-The content in the chemistry section of the article is a little hard to follow. I am not sure if it is because I am not a chemist or if it is because it was regurgitated by someone else who is not a chemist, but I'd consider rewriting/revising it!

-I also think that the protein that causes apoptosis is named, mentioned, and explained in the "cultivation and usage section," and then is again mentioned as being discovered in the opening line of the chemistry section. Unless there is more than one protein in the species that causes apoptosis I would maybe revise this as it is redundant and and I don't think it should be in more than one subheader. If they are two different proteins, maybe make it more clear for readers

-Is cordycepin where CMP18 is found???

-In the cultivation and use section, the last sentence mentions that the toxicity can be cooked out. I think this sentence should be moved up to where toxicity and edibility is talked about earlier in the subheading for a better flow and continuity.

Tone and Balance

-The content is neutral

-the content is not persuasive

Sources and References

-the links are active and they seem reliable!!