User:RioBC/HIV and pregnancy/Akyang1996 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RioBC


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * HIV and pregnancy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * HIV and pregnancy

Evaluate the drafted changes
From Adrienne: It would be nice to change the wording of the first sentence, so there is not such a sharp contrast between ‘HIV and pregnancy’ and ‘HIV in pregnancy.’ I definitely agree that there should be more gender-inclusive language to replace words like ‘woman’ and ‘breastfeeding’ (including the entire section focused on ‘breastfeeding’). I like the idea to include more information about disparities in who receives access to general healthcare and HIV-specific care in the period before getting pregnant and how that influences pregnancy outcomes. I was a little confused by the title of the subsection (‘Society and Culture’); perhaps change that title to ‘How Society Impacts HIV and Pregnancy.’ It would make a lot of sense to include the new information about disparities within that subsection (formerly titled ‘Society and Culture.’