User:Rishib23/Minority entrepreneurship/A1morales Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rishib23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rishib23/Minority entrepreneurship


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Evaluate the drafted changes
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This article did not have a legend for me to see the difference in edits, so I assumnedThis article draft does not look like it has a lead written just yet, it looks like the author is still currently working on this section of the article.

The article body starts off by talking about an economic downturn, because I am not sure what paragraph comes before this, I was not sure what economic downturn the author was talking about. Perhaps, it would be nice to say "The United States economic downturn in 1930," which can give the readers some context.

This is more of a suggestion but perhaps the author could link "red-lining" to a redlining wikipedia article. As well as the HOLC and Community Development Block Grant. This would be really great to show credibility as well as let readers delve into these sub topics even more.

I would say that I was a little thrown off by the article title: "Minority entrepreneurship" and how the history of redlining and other housing policies have to do with it. It might be helpful for the author to create a sub heading with something that talks about how these topics might connect to "Minority entrepreneurship".

Overall, I think that the writing for this article was neutral and informative. Similar to what was mentioned above, I think it's important for the author to connect the topic of minority entrepreneurship and the housing policies in the U.S. because otherwise it might have fit better under the redlining article or a housing wikipedia article.