User:Riverdogs54/A. R. Ammons/Leinaala03 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Riverdogs54


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Riverdogs54/A._R._Ammons?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * A. R. Ammons

Evaluate the drafted changes
The revamping of the lead paragraph really stands out!! I like that you kept the leading sentence but just added a lot of sourcing and information about his life and accomplishments.

A citation for the first sentence of the poetic theme paragraph may be nice, as I feel like talking about the reviews of other poets should have a source. Also, an additional sentence at the end of that paragraph explaining what the quoted material means in your own words would add a lot, as I don't see the point of quoting that material. Also, you could hyperlink the famous poets his work resembles, to point people towards similar poets.

I adore your paragraph about Cornell! It's well written, clearly compiles information and important facts and has good hyperlinks to other poets. In the first two sentences, there are some grammatical errors, like double spaces that I reworked if you want:

- When Ammons first arrived at Cornell University in 1964 to teach creative writing, he had not yet finished his masters degree at the University of California, Berkeley. While somewhat self-conscious about his lack of academic pedigree compared to his colleagues, Ammons established himself quickly by completing and publishing six well-received volumes and earning tenure at Cornell in 1969. -

Also, this is just nitpicky, but you could consider trying to find a better picture than the one currently on his page! I feel like there has to be something more professional out there. Finally, I think there's something weird with your citations, as on my page they look red and need editing, but maybe check in class because I can't tell what exactly is wrong.

Overall, I think your additions are really good, and exactly the facts/info I'd be looking for if I just naturally opened up his wiki page, so I think it's perfect!! Great job.