User:Riverdogs54/A. R. Ammons/Rn15440 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Riverdogs54


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 * User:Riverdogs54/A. R. Ammons


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * A. R. Ammons

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I really like the changes you've made to the lead. It is concise, maintains the previous information, but adds extra facts that are important, and can be quickly gleaned. I like the inclusion of his time teaching at Cornell, as well as the addition of the works he received an award for.

Content

I think the "Poetic Themes" section is a good addition, maybe it could use a bit more refining. I see you've mentioned authors that his work seems to draw inspiration from, but then you also add a quote which basically says the same thing. Maybe you could rewrite it a bit so that you just have your paraphrasing, and use the quoted material as a citation? Otherwise, I think it's good!

I also really like the addition of the section about his time at Cornell! One suggestion I might have is to adjust the organization a bit - it's a bit of a wall of text at the moment, so maybe some line breaks could help. Maybe also consider arranging paraphrased information so that you don't need to have as many references to the same citation? But it's not a huge deal, I think the information is conveyed quite well."Both from North Carolina, the Ammons and Morgan"I think the "the" should be removed? But in terms of sources, I think you've included plenty of sources, which is great. The writing is all concise and easy to follow.

Overall, one or two nitpicks, but I think your changes are all great and add to the information available in the article positively!