User:Rivico/Robert Grosseteste/Jpegthebitmap Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rivico


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rivico/Robert_Grosseteste?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Robert Grosseteste

Evaluate the drafted changes
Rivico is working on adding Grosseteste's work on the qualities of light. There is currently no information available on his works on light in the article. What Revico is a good start, but more work needs to be done. Very good source, though, and I'm waiting with baited breath to hear about clara and impurum. Also, I'm not sure, but do those technical terms need be italicized?

On what is outside the sandbox, the link saying "see biography above" probably needs to be edited out. The rest of the first sentence under "works" is somewhat non sequitur, and needs to be rewritten. Also, this section lacks citations.

There is a section that simply says "However, Grosseteste is best known as an original thinker for his work concerning what would today be called science or the scientific method," and that's the entire paragraph. How did Grosseteste further the scientific method, and where is the source on this? Oh, I found it, later in the "Science" section. Some editing should fix that just fine. The beginning of the second paragraph under "Science" also needs more citations, and how. While Wikipedia desires a source for every claim, I try to do at the very least one source per paragraph.

I suppose the only other thing I would suggest is if you can find texts of his works, to try and link them in the "further reading" or "external links" sections.

Response to Peer Review
Thank you for the detailed review. I do need to italicize the definitions, actually add my source to the addition, and fully complete that addition. I'm very happy that my source is of a good quality, however the reason I didn't finish the rough translations was because my source said that the was no actual translation for these terms so that means I'm going to have to use context clues when defining each quality. Also thank you for so much for finding other places that this article needs to be worked on, I will get to these!