User:Riyaaarul/Water supply network/Shreya.C123 Peer Review

General info
@Riyaaarul
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Riyaaarul/Water supply network
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Water supply network:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Riya, here's my peer review -

Overall, your changes are thorough, but here are some ways you could strengthen it:


 * I think the section copied from the the original future approaches section has some grammar errors, so just making sure to proofread it before the final version would be good.
 * Your in-line citation don't follow Wikipedia's format of footnotes.
 * For the challenges section, I think you could maybe add a few more examples since it's only two right now.
 * You refer to a lot of problems within one challenge. For instance, in your second challenge of "skewed development", you mention rural displacement and marginalization of Indigenous communities. Dividing this up into more than one challenge and having specific cases and examples would really strengthen this section, considering that it will be setting the tone for the rest of the paragraph.
 * Expand on what you mean or are referring to in "accumulation by dispossession"
 * When speaking about anti-dam protests, it would be good to include examples. Anti-dam protests are spearheaded by Indigenous communities, so examples like the Klamanth River really demonstrate what you mean by this.
 * Please explain more about water recycling technologies - you cover more about why it's important but not how it works.
 * Your references list do not include all of the sources you referred to.
 * I think that in terms of organizing the future directions section, you could use a list - either numerical or bullet points - to organize your information. The shorter sentences make it feel less detailed and more scattered.

Great job! This is such an important topic, so thank you for adding more to these sections!