User:Rizing153rose/Sadiqi Beg/Figapartmenttoast Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rizing153rose


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rizing153rose/Sadiqi_Beg?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sadiqi Beg

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The lead seems overly detailed, acting more as an introductory biography than a brief overview of the entire article. I think that maintaining something close to what the original article has right now for a lead might be more concise and offer a better summary of the article. In its current state, the lead does provide an overview of each section of the article, as there is only one section -- biography -- that combines all the information on Sadiqi Beg. However, the lead might be better edited to reflect the work (miniatures) that Sadiqi did under Sha Abbas I.

The content added is relevant to the article, and the information added is about his early life and how he started painting for the royal court. It is also up to date with contemporary research. I do think that this article addresses an equity gap or historically underrepresented group, as there is often very little information on non-European artists. I think that there could be more information added on the style of painting he did and his later life after he left court. I think edits could also be made to the existing material to remove some of the excess information, such as the conversion of the price of the paintings into three separate currencies.

The article is not biased.

All of the sources added are scholarly sources or references from other encyclopedias. The sources are all fairly current, though I do not think being up to date is an absolute requirement, as this topic in general is not one that is frequently pursued in academia. The links that I tried have worked.

The content added is fairly decent, but could use revision on matching the flow of the rest of the article. There were relatively few sentences added, so I cannot speak to the organization. I would argue that the material should belong in the biography section of the article, not the lead though. There are minor grammar issues (capitalization).

There are no images added to this article.

As a whole, I think that this is a decent start to furthering information on Sadiqi Beg -- we learn a little more about his life prior to becoming a court painter. The information added is well-cited and relevant. It can primarily be improved by adding more information to the article, as there was relatively little added to the article.