User:Rkeaveny/Long-term effects of cannabis/M4c9s0 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rkeaveny


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rkeaveny/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Long-term effects of cannabis

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'm so impressed that you chose such challenging article to work on. One particularly challenging aspect to address is the conflicting information. For example, under the "Head and Neck" subheading it states, "A 2011 review of studies in the United States found that although some supported the hypothesis that cannabis use increased the risk of getting head and neck cancer, when other factors are accounted for the majority did not. Gordon and colleagues (2013) said there was a risk of these cancers associated with cannabis use over a long period of time. A 2015 review found no association with lifetime cannabis use and the development of head and neck cancer." There is also some repetition in the article that may be contributing to a tone that is not neutral. Under the "Cancer" subheading head and neck cancer is first mentioned, with details from the cited literature review. The lung section follows, then the more specific Head and Neck section, with conflicting information. The first mention of head and neck cancer is from the article that is again cited in the second sentence of the Head and Neck section.