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Created new Sandbox page https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Rlair/New-Sandbox&action=edit

Article Evaluation: Lynchburg Assignment
-Tone of voice was a little piecemeal and was not the same throughout. May help if when someone edits they try to match the rest of the article's tone of voice.

-Awkward wording in some places

-History section was a little awkward because of the jumping back and forth in time, especially in the early history section. It may help this if the early history part was divided into further divisions such as religious, establishment, and so on.

-Article is relevant, and everything seems to be an important part.Some parts may need some more work, such as adding an archaeology or African-American Suffrage and rights part to the history section.

-The article is very up to date, but some sections are lckign as the last update is in 2015, and could be updated a little to reflect changes.

-The article's tone appears to be neutral, especially about very controversial issues. There is one phrase that is in quotes, that I am unsure if it is a partial quotation or for emphasis, but this may be able to be changed.

-Some claims need citation, but most other claims are sourced.

-Citations are good, but some do not work.

-Sources seem neutral

- Some interesting coversations are going on behind the scenes, such as about subdivisions that are not on the main page, like bands, local businesses, and other interesting topics that are not included in the current page. Some conversations seem to be more about putting Lynchburg down and insulting it, then about editing the page, a little unnecessary?

Finding Sources: Campbell County
-https://www.co.campbell.va.us/

-https://www.campbellcountyvahistoricalsociety.org/

-Fawcett, Marian Asher. An Historical Sketch of Campbell County, Virginia. Place of publication not identified: publisher not identified, 1963.

-Our Quaker Friends of Ye Olden Time: Being in Part a Transcript of the Minute Books of Cedar Creek Meeting, Hanover County, and the South River Meeting, Campbell County, Va. Lynchburg, Va: J.P. Bell Co., Pub, 1905.

-Campbell, Charles. History of the Colony and Ancient Dominion of Virginia. Philadelphia: J.B. Lippincott and Co, 1860. (good overview source)

-Historical section needs to be added upon, rather small.

-Relations to other counties possibly?

-Religions/origin of county in relation to religions (i.e. Quakers)

-Fix grammar and flow, is awkward in places

-Education section, such as schools in county

-Rlair (talk) 16:05, 7 February 2019 (UTC) Rlair (talk) 17:04, 5 February 2019 (UTC)


 * A good start. Evaluation needs to be more substantial. Look for more substantial, published sources, something that is more suitable for research.dddonald (talk) 14:34, 7 February 2019 (UTC)

Good insights! Keep these things in mind when working on your own page. And consider coming back here to make improvements on your own!dddonald (talk) 15:00, 31 January 2019 (UTC)

Rlair (talk) 17:42, 7 February 2019 (UTC)

Images -check Campbell County library/site for historical sites/maps -Department of historic resources -World Cat -Link out more -Don't rely on one source as much Rlair (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Make these changes for 2nd draft

Campbell County Page Draft
Rlair (talk) 16:16, 7 February 2019 (UTC)

"The area that would become Campbell County was first settled by Europeans, initially Scotch-Irish Presbyterians, in the late 1730s. After nearly fifty years of immigration and development, the newly formed county was established in 1782 from part of Bedford County. Campbell County was named for Revolutionary War hero, General William Campbell, who is known for the 1780 Battle of Kings Mountain. The independent city of Lynchburg, Virginia was subsequently formed from the county in 1786.[4]

From its earliest days, the county relied on tobacco as the primary cash crop and basis for the economy, though it also developed early manufacturing operations. Brookneal, with its strategic location on the Staunton River, was long an important tobacco and textile hub. However, the departure of manufacturing and the changing tobacco market has forced Campbell to transform from a mainly agricultural area into a mixture of suburban and rural communities.[4]" -To be edited and added onto- Rlair (talk) 17:05, 12 February 2019 (UTC)

Section above is the Original History section of page, not lead in, used as reference for what to add

History
The Native American tribes of the Monacan, Iroquois, and Cherokee were the original inhabitants of the Campbell County area, but were later forced west due to the settlers' progress. Governor Willaim Gooch in 1727 created a couple of "inducements" in order to lure settlers to the Campbell County area. These inducements were that if one settled on the Staunton River "in the bounds of the newly formed County of Brunswick" then they would be freed from paying levies for ten years. The second "inducement" was that the settler could claim 400 acres simply by building a cabin on the land and by "planting a patch of grain". The inducement's attempt to draw settlers was not vastly successful with the exception of a few new settlers, and the Governor soon took mention of his inducements to the ocean ports in which immigrants were arriving in America, as well as to the ports back in their homelands. This great difficulty in gaining new settlers for Campbell County is one of the reasons that the Governor allowed the Scoth-Irish immigrants with Presbyterian beliefs to gain religious freedom, in order to secure as many new settlers as possible for the newly founded county.

The area that would become Campbell County was first settled by Europeans, initially Scotch-Irish Presbyterians, in the late 1730s. After nearly fifty years of immigration and development, the newly formed county was established in 1782 from part of Bedford County, and was the first county formed after the American Revolution. Campbell County was named for Revolutionary War hero, General William Campbell, who is known for the 1780 Battle of Kings Mountain. The independent city of Lynchburg, Virginia was subsequently formed from the county's land in 1786. Jeremiah Rust donated the land that would become the county's seat named Rustburg. The towns of AltaVista and Brookneal were created due to their business advantages as well as the "intersection of trails". Altavista was planned by a group of businessmen in 1907, due to its "strategic" location and "potential" as a new location for a railroad.

From its earliest days, the county relied on tobacco as the primary cash crop and basis for the economy, though it also developed early manufacturing operations. Brookneal, with its strategic location on the Staunton River, was long an important tobacco and textile hub. However, the departure of manufacturing and the changing tobacco market has forced Campbell to transform from a mainly agricultural area into a mixture of suburban and rural communities. Campbell County was also an iron manufacturer and begun operations Pre-Revolutionary War and continued operations in Oxford Iron Works until it was closed in 1875. The building still remains standing to today.

Campbell County opened its first public school in 1871 after the Civil War. In 1878, Campbell County and Lynchburg became two separate entities when Lynchburg was recognized as an independent city. The first school fair was held in Rustburg, the county seat, in 1908. This was the first school fair ever held in Virginia and was started by the Virginia Federation of Women's Club, "with the aid of J.S. Thomas, then school examiner in the district, and with the agreement of the Van Dyke League to help in Campbell." This fair was a showcase of "expert knowledge and training," as well as each child's best work.

Campbell County and its residents have participated and given aid in many wars. They have had soldiers involved in the American Revolution, Civil War, World War I, World War II, the Korean War, Vietnam War, Gulf War, and the War in Afghanistan. Rlair (talk) 07:21, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

Religion
The three main religions in Campbell County's origin was Quakerism, Protestantism, and Presbyterian. Each of these religions and those who practiced them came to Campbell County in order to gain religious freedom, they migrated from many places, but most migrated from around the area of Colonial Williamsburg where the Episcopal Church reigned and made practicing other religions extremely difficult.

The Quakers gained a foothold within the Campbell County area due to Sarah Clark Lynch, wife of Charles Lynch, the founder of the ferry boat service across the James River and mother of John Lynch, the founder of Lynchburg. Due to Sarah Lynch's influence their application for a meeting house was approved, and the South River Friends Meeting House was built.[|South River Friends Meeting House] The Quakers later migrated from the area due to disagreements with the other Campbell County populace over issues such as slavery and the American Revolution. The Quakers maintain pacifist beliefs and as such during the American Revolution when much of America was fighting for its independence from Great Britain their Quaker neighbors apparent refusal to aid them in their fight for independence greatly angered many and created a wedge between the Quakers and the Non-Quakers. Another issue of contention that the Campbell County populace had with the Quakers was their adamant belief in the abolition of slavery as the Virginian Quakers had freed all of their slaves in 1817, and as such preached how slavery was wrong and should be disallowed, which created tension with their slave-holding neighbors and caused many Quakers to leave the Campbell County area and to move West.

The Presbyterian religious faction mainly consisted of Scotch-Irish who originally came to America in order to gain religious freedom from the "Established Church in Ireland" and to create a better life for themselves. They originally settled in Pennsylvania, but then moved to Virginia due to Govenor Gooch's inducements to entice settlers to come to Campbell County. The Presbyterians and their descendants then remained in Campbell County, and others who had been with them on the trip to America soon followed after, greatly aiding in the settlement process. Rlair (talk) 07:22, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

Changes to Make for 2nd draft
Images -check Campbell County library/site for historical sites/maps -Department of historic resources -World Cat -Link out more -Don't rely on one source as much

Make these changes for 2nd draft