User:Rlyantonio/Slave Old Man/Zoenaylor47 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rlyantonio, Kcraven12, and GreenTea32


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rlyantonio/Slave Old Man


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * The introductory sentence in the lead is full of great, useful information! Not too wordy, but still very informative; the basic info about the translator, author, and publication language and date were helpful.
 * It would be helpful to add a brief description of the major sections of your article; I know Wikipedia suggests to include that in the lead. That's something my group needs to add too!
 * Your lead is very strongly written! Perfect unbiased tone and concise information.

Content


 * The content of your article, especially the summary, is great! It is relevant to the book and up-to-date.
 * I really appreciated the History of Creole Slavery section. You could have easily included a section on slavery in general, but that specificity made it even more relevant to your novel.
 * Although I see no missing or incomplete content, the Structure section could be more developed. Maybe describe how each of the sections fits in with the plot of the book?
 * The division of the Characters section was creative; splitting the types of characters into protagonists and antagonists was clever, helpful, and something I've never seen done before!

Tone and Balance


 * The content of your article is neutral and does not lean towards one side of an issue in any section.
 * I see no attempt to persuade me of any point of view.
 * Great job!

Sources and References


 * Your sources look great, meaning they seem reliable, up-to-date, and thorough. I especially know and trust Britannica, the New York Times, and Wall Street Journal.
 * Awesome job using the JEWL search! That helped us find our reviews as well.
 * All of your links worked! Awesome job!
 * It looks like sources seven and eight are the same.

Organization


 * Just a small note for your Structure section: the number seven in the last bullet point should be spelled out since it's less than the value of ten.
 * In your Summary section, you use the term "mastiff" twice in one sentence, and it sounds a bit awkward. I would change the second usage to the "dog" and begin the next sentence with "It."
 * Your article is very concise!
 * I don't see any other errors, grammatical or otherwise.

Images and Media


 * Are there any images of the author available? I know it can be very difficult to find one that isn't copyrighted!

New Article Notes


 * Your list of sources is diverse, which will be very helpful to readers; great job on including historical references, reviews, and information on the awards.
 * Your linking to other articles is fantastic! I would not have thought to link to "mastiff," but I'm glad you all did!

Overall Impressions


 * All of the content of this article is very concise. So concise, in fact, that I would say you do not need to be afraid to flesh out each section a bit more—especially the Structure and Plot sections.
 * Your Critical Acclaim section is well laid-out. I might add that structure for quoting reviews to our own article!
 * Including the Editions and Translations section was a great idea. It would not have worked for a book published only in its original language or in just one edition, so that's neat you thought of it!

All in all, awesome job! I think developing a few paragraphs just a bit more, editing a few sentences, and deleting one duplicate source are all the suggestions I have for you :-)