User:Rmcconne/ATPase/Grace.volk7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Rmcconne


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * ATPase


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * ATPase

Evaluate the drafted changes
The section in the sandbox is Mechanism of Action, so I will skip questions regarding the lead section.

I like the edits made to the first paragraph in the Mechanism of Action section. It is definitely clearer, more concise, and easier to read. The next paragraph also makes it easier to read and comprehend. I like that it is cut down from the current Wikipedia article, as that version uses more complex and unnecessary sentences for explanations. These corrections are definitely an improvement.

The rest of the information is all added, and I think it is an important addition. It is definitely relevant, and I thought the tone was neutral throughout the section. I would double check the grammar and use of symbols in the paragraph about bacterial ATPase. It seems like there could be some missing alpha and beta symbols, but I am not an expert, and these could be used completely correctly. I am also unsure of the use of citations. There is only one used for the entire section. I think possibly adding more citations or putting a citation earlier in the section (instead of only at the end) would help this article. The lead section of the article is also a little long and detailed, so if you have time, I think some small changes to this would help a lot.

Overall, I really liked the structure and additions, and I think that the changes made to this section really improved the article as a whole. It has definitely added to the quality of the article, and the strength of the article is increased. Neutral language was used throughout, and the content is easy to read.