User:Rn15440/After Apple-Picking/Riverdogs54 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rn15440


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rn15440/After_Apple-Picking?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * After Apple-Picking
 * After Apple-Picking

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I think you make some very solid improvements to the article! Regarding the lead section, I like how you reorganized the syntax to make make the section flow better for the reader. I also like how you added a few more details on the scope of the poem's length and rhyme scheme. My only suggestion is that you may want to find a better way to say that the poem is "loosely iambic pentameter." I know this term existed in the article before your edits, but I think there might be a clearer way to say that the meter is predominantly but not consistently iambic pentameter (to be fair, I'm not even sure the way I just phrased it is clear). I understand how you might not want to go into such detail on meter in the lead section, so maybe you could elaborate on that in the body of the article.

In regards to the body, I appreciate the conciseness of your summary section. You paint a clear picture of the poem's plot. My only suggestion might be to elaborate a bit more on the poem's "desire for rest." Without much detail, I think you run the risk of that sentence sounding subjective. Similarly, I really like your interpretation section's exploration of "long sleep," the apple-picking latter, and the meter, but perhaps you could include a bit more detail just to ground the reader in the text. Maybe you could attach excerpt from the poem in the section? I am not sure if that would violate copywrite laws, but that could be helpful. It could also be a good idea to place your discussion of the meter in a new section, since that's a bit more technical of a subject.