User:Roach619/Poverty in Turkey/JeremyRack Peer Review

General info
Isaiah Roach - Roach619
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Roach619/Poverty_in_Turkey?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Poverty in Turkey

Evaluate the drafted changes
There was a lot of added information from the original article and that is great. The original article only gives the rate of poverty, cause of poverty, and poverty alleviation measures with 4-6 bullet points from each subject matter. Isaiah not only added an entire introduction for the background of poverty in Turkey, but he gave A LOT of crucial information and statistics from viable sources into his draft. The only critique I do have is that the information is extremely straight forward into one huge paragraph and could be split into multiple paragraphs the so the readers do not see so much information to retain at once, and that there are no images. I imagine it is hard and saddening to find pictures of poverty in Turkey so I understand. Overall, the added information/statistics provides so much more knowledgeable points from reliable sources compared to the original article.