User:Road2tip/Friends with benefits/Morgan Kennon Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing? Road2tip
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Road2tip/Friends with benefits

Lead
The leads not only easy to read (flow) but it is easy to understand (laymen's terms). The author begins with a general opening introducing the reader to the concepts discussed in the article. The author also provides examples of media that portrays the ideas of friends with benefits. I do think that there is some information that should either be eliminated or elaborated upon. Specifically, the last comment about how men and women view these type of relationships differently. I think that there should be mention of the societal pressures surrounding how men and women view friends with benefits, or wait to mention this until later in the article.

Content
The first paragraph of the content section does not flow as well as the lead paragraph. I feel that this author should ease the reader into the ideals of the feminist movement and how it affects women today. This author might add a few more transitional sentences in the beginning of the paragraph to clean up their ideas. Also, I think that the author should try to bridge the gap between historical context and modern day friends with benefits relationships. I think that this author might have some good points if they were able to support their argument with resources. This author might add some references in this section that show that women feel more unfulfilled than men in friends with benefits relationships. Otherwise, this section seems a bit subjective.

The second paragraph in the content section is about affection exchange theory. I feel that this section is not as relevant as it could be to the authors argument. If humans inherently crave affection, I as the reader want to know how sexual encounters fulfill a person. This author should try to find sources that asses how physical affection is displayed in a friends with benefits relationship.

The last paragraph in the content section is about attachment theory. This paragraph also needs to be elaborated upon. As it stands, I feel that it does not apply to this sort of relationship dynamic. I want to know where sexual interactions affect attachment. Are they mutually exclusive, interdependent or somewhere in the middle? I think adding a few references here and expanding on the categories of adult attachment would help tie in this theory.

Tone and Balance
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The initial flow of the article is great. The lead is very strong and the content sections have a lot of potential. Adding articles to support the author's comments will help enhance the tone. I think the tone of this article makes it easy to read for everyday people, but also offers intellectual insight.

Sources and References
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I think that there are several areas of this article that the author should add references to. The references used currently are mostly for definitions. This is great! But, I think having some more context will help the author support their argument and give the article more substance.

Organization
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From a big perspective, the layout of the article is good. I think that this author has a good outline of how they want their ideas to come together. Depending on the additional sources added, the content section could be rearranged depending on flow and relativity. But, this is a great staring point.

Images and Media
This author used one picture that was relevant. This author also made several references to movies and media that help me understand these concepts. As a reader, having the ability to see friends with benefits play out in a story, or a movie, helps me comprehend what is going on.

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This article has the required amount of sources, but I think that the list needs to be more exhaustive. As mentioned before, a few of the sources are to define concepts of theories. I think that the information given in the article needs to be backed up by more epicycle studies and research. Overall, I think that this author has an innovative perspective on friends with benefits relationships and would be able to make a strong argument in their favor.

Overall impressions
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This author has great ideas, great tone, and a great layout of the article. My biggest suggestion would be to find relevant sources to support the theories and concepts discussed throughout the article. Without them, parts of article can seem suggestive. Adding articles will also help strengthen the tone and balance, and also enhance credibility. Overall, well done!