User:Roarkstata/Ethnic villages of China/SallyJohnson12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Roarkstata


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Roarkstata/Ethnic villages of China
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ethnic villages of China

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: The first paragraph of the article is really informative but I think it could be shorter. I think two to three sentences would be a little bit more manageable. It looks like you're planning to separate the first couple of sentences from the rest that so that's great!

Content: I like how you have the article broken up into smaller sections and it seems like all the information you have is relevant. I also really like how you talk about popular culture because I think that's an interesting topic for modern readers. I think it might be nice to know how many ethnic villages there are and how the ethnic villages work. I was also wondering about the history of how this division was created and whether there is any conflict between villages.

Tone and Balance: I think you did really well here. Your tone is neutral and there doesn't seem to be any bias. I also don't think you spent too much or too little time on any one topic.

Sources: You cited sources appropriately and credited the sources of all the information you added. I think the original creator of the article forgot to cite information in the lead section so you may need to go back and cite that if you plan to keep what was already written. You have a good references section with credible sources so this part of the article looks good!

Organization: The content is well-written and easy to read. I don't see any errors and I like how you included hyperlinks to other relevant Wikipedia articles.

Images: It looks like you added an image which is nice! It seems relevant and enhances my understanding of what these villages might look like. The caption is helpful too.

Overall Impressions: Overall, I think this looks good! The article was very short before so the information you added helps me better understand the topic. I think you did well with the sourcing, the writing style, and the division of the article into manageable sections. If I could change anything about the article, I would shorten the lead section and add a little bit more explanation about what the villages are and how they work.