User:Robert.darragh/Social media use by Barack Obama/Elizabeth.stites Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Robert.darragh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Robert.darragh/Social_media_use_by_Barack_Obama?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social media use by Barack Obama

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead does have a summary sentence to introduce the possible edits, but it is a little too vague. The end of the lead, "social media has both positive and negative impacts in many ways," is not specific enough to make it into a wikipedia article. The location of this edit is very specific, which is good and helps me understand the layout of what you are trying to get across. The sources are not cited correctly within the draft and there are a lot of misspellings and wrong punctuations, which is fine for this draft but should be revised. There also could be more sources to back up the edits you are trying to make because a source like "The Atlantic" is not peer reviewed by an editor or publisher and might not be taken seriously as a reference. I think this is a good rough outline for possible things to add to this article, it just needs to be worked through and made a lot more specific.

Thank you for your feedback, we definitely need to work on arranging the article a little more. We will definitely work on the lead and give more explanation on that.