User:Robert.darragh/Social media use by Barack Obama/GrayMessersmith Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Social Media Use by Barack Obama


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Robert.darragh/Social_media_use_by_Barack_Obama?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social media use by Barack Obama
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social media use by Barack Obama
 * Social media use by Barack Obama

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The content is all relevant to the topic. However, It’d be more ideal if the draft was way more polished, with a few more examples of the changes instead of just talking about it. The added content was a bit skewed in favor of Obama, so being a bit more unbiased could work. The actual content added is going to have to be much better grammatically too. The two sources are good, and provide useful information on the topic. Ultimately, the original article is already done well, so any addition made to it is going to have to be a quality add. Ensure that the information you're adding is new to the article and it enhances the readers understanding of the article.

I understand how you feel that the content was a bit biased and I will work on that in the future. Again, thanks for putting in the time to read and reflect on my draft. I will work on my grammar in the future too! Like you said, I will try and keep the article it is but just add quality, and make it more neutral and polished. Thank you so much for the terrific feedback.

Thank you so much for your input, we were aware that this article was already done really well, we will try our best to put a really good quality work.