User:Robert.darragh/Social media use by Barack Obama/Nikkig1221 Peer Review

Lead: the lead is very concise and is a good summary of the content of the article. Instead of "how often he uses the social media platform", it could say "how often he uses social media platforms" because he is active on all social media platforms.

Content: the content was all over the place but I can tell it's just because it is a very rough draft of what the article would be and its not all put together. Definitely organize the information in the order you want it to be in. The additional content is good, it needs to be expanded on but it is all relevant, up-to-date, and unbiased.

Tone and Balance: the information is unbiased, there isn't really enough written out yet to say what needs to be changed or what biases there are

sources: Happywookie? does not seem like a reliable source. The references are scattered right now (again, because its a rough outline) so it's hard to tell what the sources being used are.

organization: it definitely still needs to be organized and is hard to follow as of now, but the information is there. Everyone's information is separate and there are spelling and grammatical errors that need to be worked through

Response:

Thank you for the feedback I will make sure to look through out article and make it as coherent as possible. I also plan to make sure that our information is better represented and conveyed throughout the article.

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Thank you for your input, we do notice that the organization of the draft is a little rough, and we will work towards that. Thank you for all of the suggestions.