User:RobieHillier/Highlife/Tommytz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RobieHillier


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RobieHillier/Highlife?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The essay does an excellent job of introducing Highlife. I observed that the section you wrote concentrates on "history." This section may be divided into numerous subsections for ease of understanding. For instance, segment it into timeline developments related with a certain event. Additionally, if you can include some of the sources you consulted while writing the piece, it will become more credible.