User:Rockinslick/What For? (album)/Xiying Huang Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Rockinslick


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rockinslick/What_For%3F_%28album%29?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * What For? (album)
 * What For? (album)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content:


 * General Feedback: I think the content you added in gives me a good overview of what the "what for" album is and provide some useful background for me to know about the creator as well. It is also great to see you have cited different reliable sources to introduce the music videos in the album. Though this article looks much better than the previous version, you could still enrich the content and make it more organized for readers, for example, I would suggest you to add sub-sections to elaborate more about this album and meanwhile help readers navigate the page easier. Other than that, your edition is pretty good for me.


 * Revision suggestion
 * I would recommend you to separate your work into different sub-sections, such as "background", "lyrics", "music videos", and so on. Restructuring your article in such way will give you more spaces and possibilities to add detailed information as you keep editing your work. Your content seems very solid now. However, if you plan to elaborate more on each aspect, creating sub-sections is a good way to get you started.
 * In terms of the content, it will be interesting to talk about some personal stories behind this album or anything that connects the creator with the album. If you want to add some new content, this is a point that you could research for and I bet other readers may be curious about that as well.


 * Tone and Balance
 * The description is unbiased and neutral throughout the article.
 * I can tell you are just presenting the facts and not convincing readers to any certain point of view.


 * Source and Reference
 * All reference links work for me!
 * From my end, there is no outdated sources in your reference page.
 * It is nice to use various types of sources including text, video, audio, etc.


 * Organization
 * The content is informative for me.
 * My recommendation is to add some sub-sections, refer to the 'revision suggestion' for more details.


 * Image and Media
 * It would be helpful if you could insert some album-related images into the article.
 * Visual materials would help readers better understand your topic.

Summary: Good job! I really enjoy reading your article. All my suggestions above is only my personal opinion, you do not have to change it that way if you don't like it. Otherwise, good luck with your editing :)