User:Rockinslick/What For? (album)/Zjopiniano Peer Review

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Rockinslick


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rockinslick/What_For%3F_%28album%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * What For? (album)
 * What For? (album)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Rockinslick! I really enjoyed reading your wiki page on the What For? Album :)

You added a lot of really detailed and insightful information and I think you did a great job! I've never listened to this album, but after reading your article I definitely will check it out!

Specifically, I really enjoyed:

- The details, explanations, and analyzation within the first paragraph—I think this paragraph was so well-written and gives a lot of history behind the artist and how his art is created. I love the details behind the genre/tone of the album and what specific audiences would enjoy the music.

- The quote, "I’ve done electronic R&B and more traditional recorded type R&B stuff–I just wanted to see what else was out there"—I think it was an amazing idea to include an actual quote from the artist and shows how versatile he is within the industry.

- The bolded and linked words throughout the article—I think it is really important for readers to be able to click on specific subjects or people they may not be familiar with

- The section about music videos—I think it was really interesting to learn about the videography aspect of the album and which songs in particular had music videos in contrast to others

Some suggestions I have are:

- Maybe adding the monetary aspects of the album—How much money did the album make/continue to make? How were sales when the album first dropped? How well did the profits from this album do in relation to his other albums?

- Maybe including fan feedback—Did fans like the album? What were their thoughts/opinions?

- Maybe not for every song (because there are so many) but going into depth about what the most popular songs are about—Giving individuals who are not really familiar with Toro y Moi's music an idea of what the messages behind his music are

- I'm not sure if the image from the original article accidentally got deleted, but adding a picture of the album's cover/picture of Toro y Moi

There really isn't much I have to critique on! I think you did an amazing job of expanding from the original wiki article and it's evident you added a ton of new, really important information. The structure of the article is really organized and spaced neatly. I'm looking forward to reading it at the end of the quarter!