User:Rocko Lunchbox/Bassari people/Herbe1mg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rocko


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rocko%20Lunchbox/Bassari_people?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bassari people

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the Lead is short and to the point. In your lead you talk about how there is a structure to the society but don't bring it up later within the article. I know that these are all first drafts so you might be planning on adding it but I would make sure you maybe create a section later on something surrounding culture or similar. This paragraph could include things like breaking down this structure they have. While it might be a very similar structure to other cultures I think it would be good to include it so that people can find all of the information on your page. I would also in this section talk more about their farming/food habits or bring that information down into it.

While I think overall the information is provided is good information if you could find more material for the Religious Beliefs section it would help make that paragraph more understandable. I also think that the information in the Art paragraph is good information. I am looking forward to you combining those into a paragraph because from how it read it seemed like just notes. I would make sure to expand on the divination rites that you discuss since you only briefly mention it when discussing the different masks. Also when discussing these masks if you can find the information maybe discuss the materials used within the mask because of the various materials used by different cultures.

For your References I think that you have a good start on them. It looks like there are two different references templates added to the bottom. I would remove one of them so that you don't continue to have the pop up saying nothing has been referenced. This would also help get rid of a gap down at the bottom. I would also take a look at some of your sources. Source number eight in particular is a source that I would try to get rid of. It doesn't seem to be the best source to be finding this material off of so I would see if it is a possibility to maybe find the information else where. There are also a couple sources that I couldn't find because they are books but some of the information that is cited to them. Overall I think this is a good start to your article.