User:Rojinkharrazi/Heather Judkins/Nounonymous Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rojinkharrazi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Rojinkharrazi/Heather Judkins


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
"Heather Judkins" in the first sentence should be bolded.

I would link the first mention of "cephalopod" to the Cephalopod Wikipedia page.

According to the Wikipedia Manual of Style, "12" in "...12 female graduate students..." should be spelled out ("twelve").

Content
The first word of section titles (e.g., Early life and education, Awards and grants) is the only word that is capitalized (unless there is proper noun later on in the title).

"bachelors" should be "bachelor's." In your first mention, it would be helpful to specify if it's a Bachelor of Arts or Bachelor of Science.

I would rephrase "...where she completed her Masters in Science Education" to something like "...with a Masters in Science Education"

I'm not sure what's described under the Awards section count as awards.

Tone and Balance
"once in a lifetime opportunity" is a subjective way to describe the NOAA Ocean Exploration Grant.

Organization
I think the Career and research section should go before the Awards and grants section.