User:Ronaldreagann/Visual metaphor/Phil the Human Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ronaldreagann


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * No Sandbox draft found


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Visual metaphor

Evaluate the drafted changes
I could not find a Sandbox draft for the article, so this review is being done by comparing edit history on the Wikipedia page. If this information is inaccurate, I apologize!


 * The paragraph added under "Advertising Uses" contains neutral and concise information. The overall contribution does benefit the article by providing more context to the subject.
 * Sources are good and benefit from being scholarly sources.
 * My main concern with the additions come in the form of citation critiques. Your citations don't match the normal Wikipedia format, which isn't major, but is important for consistency. The in-text citations in the article are generally included as a link which directs a user to the "References" section. Wikipedia has a "generate citation" button that might help to include the necessary links!

Overall I think this is a good addition to the page! The biggest help I think would just be re-formatting the sources included.

Ronaldreagann: Thank you Philip! I couldn't find where to reply, but I'm not sure why there isn't a sandbox draft. I'm not sure if there is a way to make mine viewable to you all or I've done something because I definitely have one. Thank you for the corrections! I will be sure to change the citation format and to work on the other things you mentioned as well. Very helpful.