User:RongpengZ/Rescue Mission Syracuse/Njputman Peer Review

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You guys have a lot of great information in here and also did a good job with the organization/sequence of headers. When making your next edit I would recommend cutting back on some fluff words and making some sentences more concise. Instead of saying "It gradually became more and more evident that the rooms of the Mission were inadequate" I would instead say something along the lines of "It became evident that the Mission rooms were inadequate". Also not sure if this sentence is necessary "Mission Rescue Alliance's financial reports show a good pattern of financial management and transparency."