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Summary 1: "The Prologue, The River, The Fire"
These three short episodes of Kindred stepped into the world of slavery in the 1800's. It brings in a 26 year African-American woman named Dana. She experiences brief moments of nausea and discomfort, and suddenly is transport from 1976 California to 1819 Maryland. She is sent back in time at the exact moment a young boy named Rufus is drowning in the River. This boy becomes a key reason for her time traveling. She is sent back to 1976 once the boy is safe. She had spent minutes in 1819, but only seconds in 1976. Later on she is transported back to 1819, but is not greeted by a river, she is greeted with fire. She appears when Rufus is torching the inside of his room. Once again she saves him, but doesn't understand why she keeps coming back. This time she spends a few hours in 1819.

Summary 2: "The Fall"
In this chapter, Dana goes back to 1819 with her white husband Kevin, after Rufus breaks his leg climbing a tree. They have to infiltrate and immerse themselves with the population around them, meaning The Weylin Plantation. They take on gender/race oriented roles within the plantation. All was going smoothly until Dana decided to remove a book from the Weylin house library and use it to teach a slave boy to read and write.

Summary 3: "The Fight"
The Fight reflects on Rufus as he is older. He has become like his father and then some. He is entangled with Alice and Dana over Alice being with Rufus, and Dana contacting Kevin. It was 5 years later, and Kevin was no longer on the plantation. Rufus promised Dana to contact Kevin for her but he never did. The father, Tom, found out about the arrangement and contacted Kevin. Kevin returned for Dana, and upon their final escape, they would have been caught if it wasn't for them time traveling again to 1976.

Summary 4: "The Storm", "The Rope", and "The Epilogue"
This is the crucial part of the story where you fully see Rufus turn into a complete character. Rufus already has kids with Alice, Tom Weilyn dies of a heart attack, and Dana is enslaved once again. Dana ends up cutting her wrists believing she will be transported back to 1976. Alice ends up killing her self thinking that Rufus sold their kids out of anger. Filled with guilt, Rufus also attempts suicide. Dana and Rufus have tension, and Rufus attempts to rape Dana. Dana, instead of letting it happen, she stabbed Rufus several times, and was transported back. She didn't get to keep herself whole as Rufus was holding onto her when she went back to 1976.

Butler's Biography Assignment
A)	The lead section is very weak and dry. It only focuses on her late accomplishments and does not touch on her in general. The structure is definitely written improperly, and lacks the hit points to attract the reader.

B)	The article is structured in a way that makes it difficult to follow. It goes with a timeline, but it seems to skip over key points. In the Career section, it is too cluttered, and should be revised. Career section should speak on her first job, written work, failure, etc… to better understand how she accomplished what she did. C)	In her Early Life section it’s missing a great portion of her struggles. It is also lightly touching on how she became the women she did. Career is missing more information about her background in her field.

D)	The Career section is too long and unorganized. Works section could use a bit of description under each point. Some sections like Early Life seem to be well balanced, but lack real substance on her actual background.

E)     The article contains partial neutrality in the language. Some areas seem to head into a "self" aspect, more like an opinionated response.

F)	The references are questionable. It provides plethora of sources, but the sources weren't properly used, and are not really reliable.

G)	The external link should stay the same except for the few that are personal opinions of unreliable groups.