User:RooftopWriter/Aimee Cox/Fedjinev Peer Review

The first introductory paragraph: I think after naming her research interests, it may be a good segway into talking about her research, so I think maybe it could be more impactful if some research followed the interests. Just in a survey form that you'll delve in deeper later? This piece is very neutral and well researched. I wonder what embedded links for major projects could look like. I'm not sure of formatting, but is the bolded blue text only for links that lead to other wiki pages? If not, then maybe embedding a link into "BlackLight Project" or "Shapeshifters" could be really cool in the beginning.

I'm a little hazy on whether Cox is currently a dancer and choreographer and no longer uses these characterization points or still is a dancer and choreographer? I think in the beginning you use passive language, but in the section that breaks down the history and importance of dance to Cox's work, it changes a bit, so just deciding on a tense is a vibe.

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