User:RooftopWriter/Aimee Cox/Hgarth Peer Review

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Overall you are off to a great start. Your sources look excellent, I am glad to see so many secondary sources on Cox. I love the contents box too! Tone is neutral.

For the intro section your next steps are to start linking to other wikipedia pages on the topics you bring up. Like linking to the wikipages for the institutions she has worked at and the organizations she has danced with, link to the ABA page, etc. Some of the details on her education will end up coming out of here and going into your education section.

In the introduction section when you say "where she did her fieldwork" you should add which project it was for, since she has several projects in different places now

Obviously filling in personal life, education and awards are your next tasks.

You can also expand somewhere to give a general overview of the kind of scholarship and theories that she engages in-- see for example the page on Michel Foucault where it says "Foucault's theories primarily address the relationship between power and knowledge, and how they are used as a form of social control through societal institutions. Though often cited as a structuralist and postmodernist, Foucault rejected these labels. His thought has influenced academics, especially those working in communication studies, anthropology, psychology, sociology, criminology, cultural studies, literary theory, feminism, Marxism and critical theory." you could try to do something like that for Cox as well. Michel Foucault

You can also use her talks/presentations when you talk about her major works--many are up online. I hope you will also expand the major works to cover some of her articles.

Great work!