User:Rosaamoore/Blue Moon Tavern/DeLandNebbb Peer Review

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Rosaamoore
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The article is very clear and consice, I like how the writer clearly states what the tavern does and the history of the tavern in a up front way and I really like the choice of words in this article like "stipulated" or "scrutiny". I also liked how there is some sort of personality in the writing itself but I think it could lead into a problem for the tone or neutral standing of the article. LIke the line "After much convincing Hank", I don't know about this line maybe just make it a simple sentice like "Hank using his college fund...". As for the lead maybe you can try to fix it becuase the orignal from the current article is not that leading you could probably make it more leading. I like the structure of the article and all the information is in chronological order and everything is in the right place. Maybe try adding spaces in between the writing so it is easier on the eyes but maybe it's just me.All the content is up to date and everything is relevant to the tavern and is in the right place. The sources are trustworthy and I think they are pretty good all from journals or reputable news. I feel like everything in the article is necessary and I know you are gonna add more so that's good. It doesn't try to lead you to a conclusion on one view point and its avery upfront article. I would try to find any phrases that aren't neutral but from a scan of it it seems neutral.